Your knowledge of popular culture is a great benefit to your essay. I would caution against using terms like 'geek' or 'nerd' however, look at my blog for the key terms for cinema audiences and use them instead.
It might be useful to consider what is meant by 'success'. Is success purely financial or is it critical. Similarly is financial success relative?
You make good use of Kermonde BUT you do need to be more specific in terms of examples from the film (it would also make sense to move your 2D v 3D section to this part). Likewise you need to be more direct in terms of comparisons with US films, you mention TDK but only in passing and fail to compare throughout.
Avoid inserting graphs as this is not something you would do in the exam.
Overall you have a clear line of opinion, you just need to ensure your comparison is stronger and that some of your examples are more specific.
Well done Harry.
ReplyDeleteYour knowledge of popular culture is a great benefit to your essay. I would caution against using terms like 'geek' or 'nerd' however, look at my blog for the key terms for cinema audiences and use them instead.
It might be useful to consider what is meant by 'success'. Is success purely financial or is it critical. Similarly is financial success relative?
You make good use of Kermonde BUT you do need to be more specific in terms of examples from the film (it would also make sense to move your 2D v 3D section to this part). Likewise you need to be more direct in terms of comparisons with US films, you mention TDK but only in passing and fail to compare throughout.
Avoid inserting graphs as this is not something you would do in the exam.
Overall you have a clear line of opinion, you just need to ensure your comparison is stronger and that some of your examples are more specific.
Argument 14/25
Evidence 12/25
26/50 D